FOR CRITIQUE-IF I DIDN'T SAY GOODBYE
Kara_Smith S.
Genre: Contemporary Country
Tempo: 80 bpm Ballad
Additional Notes:
No Notes Available
Backstory:
Things left unsaid are often the causes of heartache in a relationship. I had been tossing the concept of this idea around for a few weeks when a friend of mine was suddenly killed in a car accident. I was wondering about how he and his wife had parted that morning, and whether he had said anything to make sure she knew he loved her. This gave me the push I needed to get the lyric down and start on the music.
I hear this as a 'guy' song (Brad Paisley, Josh Turner...) although I could picture Rascal Flatts or Lady A putting this together with some great harms.
I had to flip the traditional structure a bit to pull this off, but would love some input on whether the chorus is strong enough to carry it and/or whether the third verse is needed. It's at 4 minutes right now, so if it needs tightened up, wondering if that's what might hit the chopping block.
Thanks for your help!
Lyrics:
IF I DIDN'T SAY GOODBYE Words and Music by Kara K. Smith
V1
If I didn't say goodbye this morning
If I left your side with no more than a sigh
If I only brushed your brow with a kiss that somehow said I'm leavin'
For now
V2:
If you saw my fingers printed on the mirror
If you found my shirt still wrinkled on the floor
If my dishes in the sink help you stop to think of how I lingered
Before I had to go, then you'll know...
Chorus:
I only want to be with you
And I 've left my heart here at the door
So if ever you should doubt what I was thinking' about
You should know it was you on my mind
If I didn't say goodbye
V3:
If the evening comes and you're still waitin' for me
If you've put my empty plate and cup away,
and if that radio starts playin' all those words I should be saying'
Baby, it's not too late for you to know (to Chorus)
Bridge:
I know I'm not the best at lettin' you know
All the things I'm thinkin' when it's time to go
But the way you look when I'm leaving' always messes with my head
So it seems better left unsaid...
Repeat verse 1
Tag: If I didn't say goodbye